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Meghan Z
Hi Meghan. I definitely thought this story was unique. I loved the way you made our history, our future. You took an event that was something that the world will never forget and turned it into something that the world is still going through. This story kind of reminds me of the book, 1984. I do like the Revealers. I love to write fiction and the majority of what I write takes place in the future. You wrote down something that I never would have thought of. Another thing I found interesting is the first person point of view. That last chapter makes me want to know what will happen to Heather. AMAZING JOB, Meghan!

Hi, Meghan! I loved your poem! I can relate to you when you talked about being a passport with too many blank pages. I too have a desire to travel the world, or at least to Ireland. I think it is really cool how you can play tennis! A lot of my friends do, but I can't, even when I try. Also, I am the same in the morning. I am pretty sure I hit snooze more than just a couple of times. I can't wait to read more of you'r work Meghan!


Jacob D
Hi, Jacob. I really enjoyed reading your story. I personally don't know much about football, but I do have lots of friends in it. From what they say, football can definitely be physical. I am glad you found something you love that will give you hope. We as humans base our whole entire life on hope. Without hope in something, we are not living. I Think it is cool how you still have your first jersey. I wish I had kept my first soccer jersey. Another thing I like is your simile, "It was kind of like getting a ham through a tube sock". It makes the story a little less serious and more enjoyable to read! Keep it up, Jacob!

Hi Jacob! I read your "I am Poem". I can relate to you on some occasions. I have family in Kansas, so I take plenty of weekend trips to see them. I also wake up early in the mornings on most weekdays to play racquetball with my dad. I like the line where you said "I am discovering new things about life". That is almost always true in everyone's life, the only problem is that they ignore the urge to want to discover those things.Because of that, it will not benefit them in any way. It is a wonderful poem, Jacob.