Right behind the fresh foliage lies an
Entrance to a hidden city that
Shines so bright, but it's only when you
Halt and walk behind the
Fresh Foliage you will see
Open your eyes and
Listen with your ears
Invite the sound and sight of happy children
As they frolic in the shining city where the
Gold lies in their hearts and
Excitement is in their soul.
Escape the city
And waltz through the green forest
With happy creatures
Where are the monsters?
Hiding in the Black Forest
with evil and fear
When the first Morning Dew is
Coating the Green Acres of Scotland,
I travel to my Breezy Summer House
In Norway where the grass is always Green and
Covered in snow with Green Brier
Growing by my Tennis Courts
And when I get tired, I head to England there the Green grass grows.
It's interesting that your haikus paint two very different views of the forest--one comforting and the other not.
ReplyDeleteHi Mariah! I really enjoyed your haiku about the monsters hiding with fear and evil, because when I think of monsters I think they do very similar things. Thank you so much for sharing!
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ReplyDeleteTHIS WAS SO GREAT! I loved it! The way you switched moods depending on the poem was great, you can write many different ways and about many different things. I think this is my favorite piece by you I’ve read today. I loved the one about the monsters, Where are the monsters? Hiding in the Black Forest with evil and fear.” That creates amazing imagery and fear. You’re fabulous. I’ve loved all of your writing, I hope you continue with it. It would be so great to walk into a book store one day and find one of your works up on the bestseller list. But, even if you decide not to publish and you want to keep your work private, the main piece of advice I’d like to give to you is never stop. It would be a real crime to give up on your talent!
You’re Great,
Taylor Denton
I want to go to this city you've created! I love how you used your paint chip name to inspire this great forest path that could fit into Lord of the Rings. Especially the part about the monsters in the black forest (because what is a fantasy world without fearsome monsters?). I love the line "gold lies in their hearts and excitement in their soul". I'm guessing the green forest is where good creatures dwell in contrast to the black forest where evil creatures dwell. I loved this and overall I want to visit this interesting poem's world.
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