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Meghan Z
Hi Meghan. I definitely thought this story was unique. I loved the way you made our history, our future. You took an event that was something that the world will never forget and turned it into something that the world is still going through. This story kind of reminds me of the book, 1984. I do like the Revealers. I love to write fiction and the majority of what I write takes place in the future. You wrote down something that I never would have thought of. Another thing I found interesting is the first person point of view. That last chapter makes me want to know what will happen to Heather. AMAZING JOB, Meghan!

Hi, Meghan! I loved your poem! I can relate to you when you talked about being a passport with too many blank pages. I too have a desire to travel the world, or at least to Ireland. I think it is really cool how you can play tennis! A lot of my friends do, but I can't, even when I try. Also, I am the same in the morning. I am pretty sure I hit snooze more than just a couple of times. I can't wait to read more of you'r work Meghan!


Jacob D
Hi, Jacob. I really enjoyed reading your story. I personally don't know much about football, but I do have lots of friends in it. From what they say, football can definitely be physical. I am glad you found something you love that will give you hope. We as humans base our whole entire life on hope. Without hope in something, we are not living. I Think it is cool how you still have your first jersey. I wish I had kept my first soccer jersey. Another thing I like is your simile, "It was kind of like getting a ham through a tube sock". It makes the story a little less serious and more enjoyable to read! Keep it up, Jacob!

Hi Jacob! I read your "I am Poem". I can relate to you on some occasions. I have family in Kansas, so I take plenty of weekend trips to see them. I also wake up early in the mornings on most weekdays to play racquetball with my dad. I like the line where you said "I am discovering new things about life". That is almost always true in everyone's life, the only problem is that they ignore the urge to want to discover those things.Because of that, it will not benefit them in any way. It is a wonderful poem, Jacob.

Was This Just a Dream?

My name is Jencie and this is my story.  Beyond the tall mountains and past great forests and streams, lay a little white flower on a soft grassy hill. This little flower does not stand more than a couple inches tall. It has five delicate heart shaped petals with specks of hot pink in the center but its scent is a warm vanilla and spice.

You Might be thinking, what is so special about this little white flower? You see, this is no ordinary flower. In this world we live in, very few people know of this flower. It is hidden from all who desire greed and power. Those very few people that know of this flower call it The Flower of the Mind and Soul or The Flower of Dreams.  I like to call it The Flower of the Way it Should Have Been. Call it what you want. It is one in the same. 

I picked the beautiful flower. When I did, the clouds piled up, blocking the sun and the wind picked up greatly.  I didn’t know what to do, so I just stood there. After a short moment, the wind died down and the clouds left as quickly as they came. I continued to stand there, trying to comprehend what just happened. All I knew is that I heard music playing. Upbeat music. Happy music.
I followed the sound. I walked down the grassy hill. A stream greeted me. I followed it downstream and was welcomed by a sight I never saw in my whole life. Colorful trees. They were all sorts of colors. Green, blue, orange, purple. Along with the music, I began to hear laughter from children. And sure enough on the other side of the stream, there were children no older than ten chasing butterflies with their hands up and their little feet galloping. Just the thought made me smile. There were women washing clothes in the stream, the children were most likely theirs.

Up in front of me lay a painted white bridge that went across the stream. I walked up to it and placed my hand along the railing. I slowly walked up as the bridge rose and walked faster as the bridge fell. I was under the colorful trees now. I had just realized how tall they were. I looked in front of me and saw little cottages. Because of the size of the trees, they looked to be houses of faeries. I walked closer to the village and the sound of the music still continued to grow. I could tell that the houses were made of straw as well as their roof and the doors. The cottages were still not very big. There were probably no separate rooms. I looked down and the floor turned from grass and dirt to a cobblestone road. Few people were on the streets. They all seemed so happy and walked to the beat of the music. I continued to walk down the road and the further I walked, the cottages grew in size and some were made out of wood. More people were further down the road. It all looked like I stepped back in time, one thousand years.  I still continued to scan the village. There was a blacksmith building, a jewelers, even a bakery.

“Would you like some poppy-seed bread, child? I just pulled it out of the oven!” The voice broke my thoughts.

Standing to the left of me was an elderly man with silver, stringy hair that was pulled back in a bun. He was not a plump old man, but rather fit for his age. He wore a manila colored apron that covered a brown tunic. I looked at his face and he bore a kind smile and shiny light blue eyes that smiled with his mouth.

“I don’t have any money, sir,” I said, holding my left hand up.

The man giggled and looked down for a second before turning his gaze upon me.

“Dear,” he said, “here, you don’t need money. Everyone that is a part of this place doesn’t need money. People can have as much bread as they want. Because I give out bread, I get a place to live and clothes on my body as well as protection from those outside. Who needs money when there are more important things to worry about? We are a family and we want to stay and work together. Take it, child,” Once again he lifted the bread towards me and smiled as if giving me the bread meant the world to him.

I took it and dipped my head, “Thanks.”

“Anytime!”

I continued my descent into the city. I glanced back at the friendly baker and he waved me goodbye.

People were gathered around four men and a woman. Two men were playing the fiddle. One was playing a guitar looking instrument, the other man was beating a barrel, and the woman was playing an instrument that looked like a flute. They were all assembled at the corner of a street that split in two. The people were clapping and singing an optimistic tune. I took the path to the right. Almost immediately after turning right, two men ran past me with knifes strapped to their sides. They ran through a doorway with a fence surrounding it.

I walked over to the fence to look in between the wooden strips. On the other side, there were both girls and guys, most likely no older than 25. Most were gathered to one side of the stadium. Some were sitting on pews overlooking the stadium.

I walked through the doorway that just a couple seconds before the two men walked into. I stopped walking when I was through the doorway and sat down at the pew that was right by the doorway. I was looking down into the field. Two men were fighting with swords. Were they soldiers? I continued to watch as they were stopped by two older men that looked like they were instructing them.

In that instant, I heard a horn. Arrows were flying from the trees and the people on the field moved almost instantly. They ran up the stadium seating and to the several doorways on the sides of the stadium. Was I supposed to go to?

I heard voices of the people saying things like “It’s happening again” and “bless the people of the village, bless our weapons”. I even heard one person say, "Grab the unicorns!"

“Come on, miss. You better be on your way,”

I looked up at this boy who was probably a little older than me, a sixteen-year-old girl. He offered me a hand. After a slight hesitation, I took it. His grip was strong. Together, we ran through the entrance. He led me a different way than the crowd of armed people were going to a house.

“I know you’re not from here, but you should be safe here,” his voice was kind. The smile upon his face made me think everything was alright, even though I had absolutely no idea what was going on.

Faster than I could think, he drew his sword out from his sheath and turned around. A ping sound was made. He was not fighting anyone sword to sword, he blocked an arrow.

I just stood there.

“Go,” he deflected another arrow off of his sword. He turned his face to me. “Just promise me you’ll come back,” the soft blown color in his eyes drilled into mine. I slowly shook my head.

I wanted to ask him what he meant by that promise. Was I about to leave the wonderful world I stepped into?

He winked at me then left. I ran into the house. It was a cute little house.

“In here!”

Two people with hoods covering their face ran towards the house that I was in. I crouched down behind the wall and placed my head in between my knees. My hands were shoved into my pockets of my purple laced jacket.

I felt something. Something was in my pocket.

The flower.

I took the flower out of my pocket and lifted my head to be able to see it. I smelled it. The smell reminded me of my grandparents’ house. I closed my eyes and hoped to get out of this sticky situation.

I heard a song. A whistle of a bird. I felt the wind. I opened my eyes. I was standing on the hillside I started out on. The city was gone. The colorful trees and the children chasing butterflies. But then a second after feeling bliss, everything went black.

The old rocking chair squeaked as Grandma slowly stood up.

"No Grandma! The story can't end there! I wanna know more. Who were the bad people? Who was that boy? What did you ever eat the bread? Grandma please!" 

The little girl jumped up and down to try to get Grandma to stay. She grabbed on to Grandma's night gown. Grandma turned around and bent down so she could be at eye level with her granddaughter.

"Delilah, the rest of the story, well that's for you to find out," Grandma smiled and looked up above her blackened fire place where a small glass frame sat on top of the ledge. There, in the small glass frame rested a little white flower.

I am... Mariah

I am...

born and raised in the Ozarks to a close-knit family, running around and adventuring in the hills with my younger sister, swimming in the lakes and kayaking the rivers filled with living creatures that swim alongside us.

a friend to those around me, playing games with the neighborhood kids at the pool and park, laughing with people at school, engaging in other people’s conversations even if they are not interesting and talking to those who no one else will talk to,

a leader in my friend group, the one to push people into trying new things and overcoming their biggest fears, the one to raise them up when stress is pulling them down and the hand holder that will guide and lead people through events there the light at the end of the tunnel is not seen.

the present, not the past, not the future.

the giver, one to let others go first, the one to surprise people with gifts even when it isn’t their birthday, constantly building up other people’s self-esteem, giving up my time to give to people who desperately need it.

the one that will never grow up, my imagination is my imagination and no one can mess with it.

a book nerd who will pull out a book in almost any situation, the one who constantly quotes from authors and from their books and more knowledgeable about fantasy worlds than about world history.

the church attender, the one who is there every Sunday with a thick, leather-bound bible in my hands and papers falling out of it, worshiping constantly and not just at church, playing games with the other youth kids and building eternal relationships with people whom I care for.

the dreamer with a heart as strong as diamonds and a mind as wild as a stallion.

forgiving, even when someone deserves it the least.

I am…

the soft snow on a crisp winter’s day that shines like diamonds as they fall from the heavens above, the rain on a mild spring day that showers the earth and brings life to plants to give them the strength bloom and grow. 

the princess who longs for a fairytale story in her life, but knows those kind of stories do not happen in real life.  

a cavern hidden in the hills at the base of a snow-covered mountain, concealed with treasures and hidden secrets that only true adventurers dare to seek.

the daydream that holds dancing flowers in fields that are free of storms and worries and doubt.

a room lit only by candles and my relatives coming in and guessing what sent the candles are.

a story that is constantly being written down and preserved with friendship, food, adventures, and warm hugs.

unique.